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Brigits_flame: There it goes
Note: this is dedicated to my best friend, who I hope had a fantastic 24th birthday. Youngin'. This piece is related to a couple who came before it (Heavy and Brilliance), but hopefully it will manage to stand on it's own okay.

There it goes, I think to myself as Ivnit's shield goes flying from her arm. We've been sparring for the last half hour, and I've finally gotten bored enough to push for the end.

Talking a step back, Ivnit drops her short sword and pulls out her preferred weapon. "Did you hear? There's a courier from the Archbishop!" Ivnit punctuates this latest gossip with a mighty swing of her warhammer. I manage to dodge most of the impact, deflecting it off the side of my armour, but it still knocks me back a few steps. Grateful for the brief reprieve – not that I would ever admit it – I take a moment to catch my breath before resuming the attack.

"How do you know he came from the Archbishop? Was it a Tiefling?"

Ivnit snorts at me. "No. I saw his horse, and the livery on the horse. Do you honestly think a Knight would have nothing better to do than deliver messages? Politics are part of our lessons, Ailith, you should know better than that."

I roll my eyes and feint a low swing before replying. The dwarf moves to block leaving herself open for my intended target – the elbow joint in the armour on her weapon-arm. With enough force my greatsword can be a decent blunt instrument, and I see Invit's grip falter. If we weren't simply sparring I could end her now. Instead I simply back up and grin.

"Kord isn't concerned with politics, I don't see why his paladins should be."

Ivnit mutters for a while in dwarfish. "How do you expect to know who is a worthy opponent if you don't know the background of a situation?"

"By the strength of their arm, of course," Morgan, the novice-master and my mentor, answers for me. "Ailith is quite right. As useful as it may be to be aware of the politics and beliefs of a region or people, it certainly needn't concern you when facing an opponent."

Ivnit sighs and gives me a strange look. "Yes, sir. Of course."

Eyeing Ivnit carefully to make sure she isn't planning to attack again, I turn to face my mentor.

"We have a message, I hear?"

Morgan gives me a stern look, he doesn't appreciate it when I tease the other novices. By turning my back I've demonstrated that I don't consider Ivnit a threat.

Well, I don't.

I am the most talented novice here. This is not ego, only simple fact. We are taught to evaluate the strength and capability of those around us as a matter of course, and there are no novices here who could best me. Few teachers, were it to come to that.

Then again, I doubt I could last long against Morgan. So perhaps a bit of deference is due.

I lower my eyes and move aside slightly, opening my position so Ivnit is no longer physically excluded from the conversation. She steps forward in response and I can see Morgan's lips twitch towards a smile. There. I can be diplomatic if I wish.

"Ivnit spotted the courier's horse. Is there news about the war? We haven't heard of any movement in a while."

Morgan shakes his head. "Nothing dramatic. A new batalliion of Knights has been sent to the front, but I doubt we'll be hearing anything soon."

"So why is he here?" Ivnit's voice is abrupt. Not a surprise, the dwarves sided with the Dragonborn Empire long ago. I've often wondered how Ivnit came to be training here, but I never dared ask.

Morgan hesitates and glances at me before answering. "There is a task that the archbishop needs completed. He has asked that I send one of my novices to assist with it, in lieu of their confirmation quest."

A shock of excitement runs through me, and I can see Ivnit's stance shift slightly. "Only one novice?"

Morgan inclines his head.

"Have you made your decision yet?" I try to keep my voice steady, but I doubt I've fooled anyone. Ten years I've been in this training house. Ten years I've been preparing for my confirmation, to be welcomed as a full paladin and begin my life serving Kord. Ivnit has been here just as long, I suppose, but ten years is a lot longer in the life of a half-elf than the life of a dwarf.

Not to mention, I'm better than she is.

Morgan observes us for a moment. "I would like for you both to hear what the messenger has to say. One of you may not wish to alter the traditional confirmation."

Ivnit and I look at each other. Vulnerable points, potential attacks, and likely counters run through my mind, as I know they do hers.

Her gaze drops, and the moment is broken. "Yes, sir."

***

I wake at dawn, as always. After completing my sword exercises I dress in full armour and swing my pack onto my back.

The fight was just as easy as I expected.

None of the other novices are awake yet, dawn has always been my time. I'm not surprised to find Morgan waiting for my in the courtyard, but I am pleased.

He watches me silently as I approach, his face carefully blank. I stop a few steps away from him and rest my hand on the pommel of my sword. "You had already made your decision."

He shrugs slightly. "Archbishop Bergen asked for my best."

I smile. "You had already made your decision."

"Serve Kord well, Ailith. This quest is more important than you can know. Our Kingdom depends on it."

I nod, and stand straighter. "Yes, sir." Morgan inclines his head, and steps aside for me to walk past him. I observe him for a moment longer, waiting.

Eventually he sighs and rolls his eyes. "I had already made my decision."

I grin. "I won't let you down."

Walking out of the courtyard, I smile to myself. Finally finished with training. There it goes…

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Comments
j_cat From: [info]j_cat Date: October 10th, 2008 02:46 pm (UTC) (Link)
Well I dunno about your friend but this made me wiggle happily in my seat.
bootler From: [info]bootler Date: October 10th, 2008 02:48 pm (UTC) (Link)
lol! So does that mean I get extra XP?
j_cat From: [info]j_cat Date: October 10th, 2008 02:51 pm (UTC) (Link)
Ha ha!

No.
bootler From: [info]bootler Date: October 10th, 2008 02:52 pm (UTC) (Link)
Curses. :P
avain From: [info]avain Date: October 10th, 2008 03:19 pm (UTC) (Link)
You do, however, get a lucky rock. It falls from the sky and narrowly misses your head. See? Lucky!
bootler From: [info]bootler Date: October 10th, 2008 03:19 pm (UTC) (Link)
....I shall treasure this rock always.
cedarwolfsinger From: [info]cedarwolfsinger Date: October 11th, 2008 08:38 pm (UTC) (Link)
Yay! More fantasy! I'm excited! Good stuff... I want to know more. Good luck!
bootler From: [info]bootler Date: October 13th, 2008 01:12 am (UTC) (Link)
Thanks very much! Glad you enjoyed it.
mullvaney From: [info]mullvaney Date: October 14th, 2008 08:31 pm (UTC) (Link)
Hi! I'm your primary editor this week.

Your grammar, syntax and spelling are excellent; I've read it three times, and run it through spelling and grammar checking, but neither I nor my computer found any errors.

I liked your characterization; this short piece was chock full of information about your characters shown through their remarks and actions. Ailith, a little detached, a little arrogant, Ivnit, who seems clever and crafty, and Morgan, devout, devoted, and kind. Yet you never used any of those adjectives in your piece. Your dialog flows really well, and so does the action. Nicely done!

Although this scene stands fairly well alone, it made much more sense after I had read the other two pieces. I was also very curious about the messenger, and what he had to say, and what the special task is. It may be that you plan to go into these things with some detail later on, but you could give at least a hint of what they are to round out this particular chapter.

The three pieces you have written about these characters make up a great beginning for a fantasy memoir. I liked this quite a lot, and I hope you continue on with this story thread. Best of luck!
bootler From: [info]bootler Date: October 15th, 2008 01:18 am (UTC) (Link)
Thanks very much for the feedback! I'm really pleased that the characters' personalities are coming across.

I also understand what you mean about it making more sense when read with the other two pieces as well. Writing stand-alones isn't exactly my strongsuit :P
ofshootingstars From: [info]ofshootingstars Date: October 16th, 2008 09:39 pm (UTC) (Link)
Hi! I'm one of your editors! I'm so sorry how late this is; the past week has been so hectic, but here I am now.

I rather enjoyed the dialogue and the personality of Ailith. I thought that was well done, and I always seem to enjoy reading about arrogant characters. I think it might be because of the fact that they always seem to get into something, rather than something getting into them. :D

While the dialogue was well written, I thought that this piece could be more fleshed out. The beginning where the two novices are sparring are wonderful (I really like the description of their actions, but when Morgan comes in, I feel that more description could be done. More of Ailith's thoughts could be heard, or even some background information could be written. That is why I feel that this entry was a bit... choppy. But, only in the sense that there weren't enough 'substance' to really support the really nice dialogue and characterization.

Well done!
ofshootingstars From: [info]ofshootingstars Date: October 16th, 2008 09:52 pm (UTC) (Link)
AH! Sorry... I forgot to mention something.
Talking a step back, Ivnit drops her short sword and pulls out her preferred weapon.
Just one small grammatical error. I think you want Taking instead of Talking? :D

bootler From: [info]bootler Date: October 17th, 2008 02:22 am (UTC) (Link)
Ah, yes. Always good to know that I had at least one typo in there :P

I definitely agree that this piece was a bit more abrupt than it could have been. One of the curses of procrastination, I suppose.

Overall, though, I'm glad that you enjoyed it!
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